Writing the introductory paragraph can be a frustrating and slow process -- but it doesn't have to be.If you planned your paper out, then most of the introductory paragraph is already written. Here's your chance to introduce your topic and grab your reader's attention.
While I agree that governments and individuals are spending a significant amount of money on those celebrations, I would argue that this activity is necessary and therefore can be considered acceptable.
As can be seen, the above sentence makes it crystal clear to IELTS examiner what you think about the question.
However, I believe that this trend is a threat to the identity of a nation.
IELTS examiner’s comment: Intro 2 is the better one.
All IELTS learners (even IELTS teachers) reckon that the most difficult part of writing is how to get started.
Getting started, or writing an introductory paragraph, can be easy if you remember that an introduction has four purposes: In the IELTS writing exam, the examiners are not looking for the interesting introduction as it is not assessed in your IELTS essay.
Basically, the introduction has two parts: When it comes to writing a general statement, the first sentence in an introductory paragraph should be a very general comment about the subject.
Each subsequent sentence should become more specific than the previous one and finally, lead into the thesis statement.
You have to do a lot of things in your essay for the IELTS writing within 40 minutes, for example, analysing the statement, planning your essay, and proofreading it when you have finished, so actually you just have about 35 minutes to write your essay.
There is not enough time for you to worry about having “a hook” in an introduction.